I am grammatically uncorrect today, and I don't know why. So if there is grammatical errors in my post and me, it's on purpose. There is, as you can see a major slump on my posting. The reason is it's because I was abducted by aliens and made to eat Kentucky Fried Spinach and then sent back to earth were I was an outcast to my friends and family and neighbors for turning into a spinach freak....*sniff*......Anyway it's all over now, so I can post again.
I am sitting here not knowing what to write,
and I find myself wandering thinking of night.
It is so calm and crisp and cool,
To not enjoy this time, you'd be a fool.
The stars glisten as if tiny jewels,
Like light reflecting off millions of pools.
The vastness is purely overwhelming,
Creation spinning, ever revolving.
I thank God for this gift of light and dark,
Which inside my heart has lit a spark.
Well, that was my first try of my own poetry. What'd you think? I know it's not Allen Edger Poe or anything, but tell me what you think as a stand alone poem.
Everyone is Some one's Sunny side!
Katie(Atta)
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Th meter was a bit random. Apart from that, very nice.
It's a nice poem. The rhyme is frankly strained in places (particularly lines 4 and 10), but I really like the poetic imagery and the sublime, contemplative mood. In my opinion, the loose meter gives it a sense of floating through the night on wisps of thought, tying in with "wandering", "vastness", "spinning", etc. Though you could use practice with technique, you definitely show some good poetic sensibility.
Did you really want to know what I thought??
And BTW, it's Edgar Allen Poe. ;-)
lol Isn't that what she said? That it wasn't Allen Edgar Poe?
who the heck is Massive Neutrino!?!? Micheal? Anyway, thank you. I tried.
yes, I'm massive neutrino. Look at the comments on the last post.
I like your poem. I think it's great!
I go with Gabe!
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